Four children wrote four books. Would you read one and tell them what worked?
These were written across a term in our Writing Advance classes — planned, drafted, marked, and rewritten. The covers are the students’ own.
Sharing work is part of how we teach writing. Comments here go back to the child, and they get to revise with real readers in mind — which is something no classroom exercise can give them.
Each book opens in a new tab. You don’t need to read all of it. The first page is usually enough to find one line worth mentioning.
Echoes of the Treehouse
“Please tell me this is a dream,” Max whispered, his voice cracking like the dry autumn leaves beneath their feet.
“It’s just a door,” Ava whispered back, though her own confidence sounded thin. “It’s just a piece of wood.”
“Then why,” he breathed, “is it breathing back?”
The Witching Hour
As he stepped aboard and the metal doors slid shut, Josh realised he was about to be late for much more than just a train ride.
Lana and Jane’s Secret Adventure
Chatty skyscrapers stretched toward the clouds on delicate fairy wings, while gentle unicorns grazed nearby, munching on fresh green grass that tasted like sweet popcorn and candy floss.
Adventures in Treatopia
It was a dark and gloomy day when the five heroes fell… They didn’t crumble — they had teleported across the land, but the blast had wiped away all of their memories.
Leave them a comment
If you have thirty seconds — tell one of them which line you liked best.
Not whether it’s good. Which line. That’s the feedback that actually changes how a child writes next time, and it’s the kind an adult reader can give without being a teacher.
Say the writer’s first name in your comment so it reaches the right child. Every comment on this page gets read out to them in class.
Shared with each family’s written permission. First names only.
Gaudi Huang
Nicolas’s book, Witching hours combines the fantasy of Harry potter and mystery of the 113th assistant librarian. 8/10
Lavender Xie
This thrilling adventure story is filled with haunted, mysterious suspense. I also feel
excited following the main character, Josh, a little boy, as he goes through the whole
journey full of challenges. From one world to another. At every moment of struggle and
battle. The imaginative worlds the author creates are attractive. My favourite part is
when Josh is trapped in a world that was a completely invisible Maze. “Everything in
here is hidden, – the walls, the traps, the dangers…us, and even our voices” How can
Josh escape from there? The story gripped me from the beginning to the end.
Matthew
Kevin Zhu
Josh, an 11- year-old boy, began his unknowing adventure on one Halloween night after
trick-or-treating. He never knew the last train he rode that evening, which he thought
was taking him home, was actually the beginning of a dark world full of horrified
creatures and breathtaking dangers. Luckily, he got help and company from a vampire
who went through the whole journey with him in the dark world. Beyond the dramatic
scuffle, the friendship that developed between the vampire and Josh is heartwarming. A
great story worth reading.
Caitlin